Moriah Leila

Okay, so I really like this story. It has a great plot and the conflict puts you on the edge, wondering what is going to happen next. As for corrections, ...

I think you did a good job of recapping the legend in poetry form and I rather enjoyed it. I agree with Jenthura, in that you did not have a ...

Kamas and Snoink are both right. This poem has no real cohesion, although you do have some awesome material here. As for what I think you need to correct, I ...

Hey there! Sorry it took me awhile to get to this, but here I am! Anyways, I know you wanted me to tear this to shreds, but honestly all of ...

Ah, I have finally got to the last part of this chapter. I apologize that this has taken so long, life has kind of got in the way. Anyways, I ...

Wow, I really liked this poem. It not only shared your emotions but it also told a story and approached death in an abstract way. I have to agree with ...

I like it! Justice for injustice! It reminds me a little of chiastic structure...Sorry, I totally had a flashback to high school. Anyways, I have to agree with the others, ...

Well I definitely agree that your piece deserves two dancing elephants. I enjoyed reading this, as it made me have to think. I didn't know what claustral meant, so of ...

I liked this poem. I kind of expected something a bit cliched about the dandelion, but you were rahter unique in your approach. I really liked this line: The clouds ...

I like the conversational piece this has to it, sort of like we're eavesdropping on a gab fest with your best friend. However, at times the "Take a hint" actually ...

I have to agree with Mizzle on this, your poem is totally cliched. Would love to see something a bit more original from you. I did however like the last ...

I really liked this poem, although, without you telling me what the story was about I never would have gathered that from this. Either way, I thought it was beautifully ...

Love it! This is such a brilliant poem and utterly true. I am really impressed by how well this is written, the rhyme never feels forced. And you're so smart ...

Ha ha ha, I can totally relate to this poem. I remember one time in my first apartment when I was rudely awoken by a tree full of the world's ...

Hey Eddie! I really enjoyed your poem, as always! When I read your poetry I always go away with something to think about. I love how you related the colors ...